Essay Sample 9

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Comment on the following statement:

     It’s not right to be strict with little children.

What is your opinion? Do you agree with this statement?
Write 200-250 words.
Use the following plan:
—    make an introduction (state the problem)
—    express your personal opinion and give 2-3 reasons for your opinion
—    express an opposing opinion and give 1-2 reasons for this opposing opinion
- explain why you don't agree with the opposing opinion
—    make a conclusion restating your position

 

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Some people think that it’s not right to be strict with little children whereas others think that it’s ok.

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I agree with the statement, one shouldn’t be strict with little children. First of all, children younger than a particular age just can’t help being what they are. Their brains aren’t developed enough for them to have the willpower so being strict with them just wouldn’t work. Second, there is no cause-effect understanding. So if you punish them it can only damage them psychologically.

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At the same time there’re people who believe that one should be strict with little children. Children, they say, should learn to behave from an early age and if their parents don’t teach them that, it will be very hard to do so later when the kids are grown. They will be spoiled and completely out of control.

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In my opinion these people have a point. One should be strict with children if the situation requires it. However, it’s only true for kids older than about 5 years old. Only at that age do children begin to understand cause and effect and have the willpower to keep themselves from misbehaving. Before that age they won’t know why their parents are cross with them. They might think it’s not safe to be around their parents and rebel later.

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In conclusion, I'd like to say that it’s important to understand the biology of little children. Parents should be patient and love their children. They should let them make mistakes and learn from them.

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